tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1163829887162955058.post1306961157846309798..comments2024-01-01T11:51:53.860-08:00Comments on Babbles from Scott Eagan: Watch Your Overly Descriptive LanguageScott Eaganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17209357682070126879noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1163829887162955058.post-1753072213472931982010-08-06T08:32:08.471-07:002010-08-06T08:32:08.471-07:00Ha!
That second version is early-draft me.
I hav...Ha! <br />That second version is early-draft me. <br />I have to write down every thought I have about the scene the first time through. At least I have a lot to work with on subsequent drafts.Lily Catehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17732112345439595471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1163829887162955058.post-67469600206897569852010-08-05T08:02:00.097-07:002010-08-05T08:02:00.097-07:00Great point and an excellent example here, thank y...Great point and an excellent example here, thank you Scott. Personally I love beautiful, detailed description when I read, but it should be few and far between or else it will get in the way of the plot. I tend to do that when I write.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1163829887162955058.post-56575337384990016372010-08-04T09:48:25.719-07:002010-08-04T09:48:25.719-07:00Oh, my. Time to go check the ms. I'm going to ...Oh, my. Time to go check the ms. I'm going to link this to my blog because it's very helpful! <br /><br />~JDJEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12390400360357693403noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1163829887162955058.post-61147149636481182702010-08-04T08:54:01.128-07:002010-08-04T08:54:01.128-07:00Ooooooooh, I am so guilty of grooms-covered-in-cho...Ooooooooh, I am so guilty of grooms-covered-in-chocolate-covered-mud (*squashing the Plot Bunny*) <br /><br />My problem is that when I revise, I prune the "fresh" right out of the piece. <br /><br />Is judicious description a matter of experience and experimentation? And along with that topic, when do you know revision has gone too far? (I won't even get started on letting EVERY opinion on your piece affect its quality until it is generic blag.)<br /><br />Thanks!<br /><br />P.S. I've always loved Bronwyn Scott's prose . . . she is so lyrical and makes it look effortless. Well done.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14259186665975379075noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1163829887162955058.post-6878737184512445782010-08-04T08:53:21.907-07:002010-08-04T08:53:21.907-07:00Reading the two descriptions gives me the impressi...Reading the two descriptions gives me the impression that part of it is knowing your character. A lot of things characters take for granted as always there. Scott's description took into account things which were important to Crispin at the time. The next description was a bit of everything, whether or not Crispin would have taken the time to notice.<br /><br />It's like me going into the kitchen right after cleaning it. I'll notice the brightness of the room because the ceiling lights have an opportunity to reflect off the counter tops. It's something new enough to catch my attention. I'm not going to take the time to notice every single gadget on the counters. They were there before I cleaned and they were there after I cleaned. No big deal.<br /><br />A guest might view it differently. The brightness might not matter cause they didn't see the kitchen before I cleaned. Perhaps instead they notice the scent. <i>Someone sure went overboard with the pinesol.</i> They might notice the gadgets. <i> That's a neat turnabout. Why in the world does she have so much stuff on her counters?</i><br /><br />I'm new to the writing scene. However, this is the impression I get when using limited 3rd person and making the best of the descriptions without going overboard. Get into your character's head and give the reader a glimpse through the MC's eyes.Reena Jacobshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16860984511692822921noreply@blogger.com