1st Place "How To Escape Your Pet" - New Adult
I would also say that we would need to know a bit more about these AVB's. These guys seem pretty cool but we need to know a bit more.
I would also add that I felt that Christy is reacting a bit too calm with this situation. If you were in a state like this, would you be calm?
2nd Place "Conejo Vampiro Extranjero" - Inspirational
Like the first story, I do feel that I need to know a bit more about the characters and the situation. It seems like there was too much time spent on the Cartel side of things and not enough on the AVB's and why Beatrice has such an investment.
In this case, the balance between the narration and the dialogue that was missing in the first one showed up here.
Congratulations to both of you. Send me an email at the agency (the main email and not the contest one) and I can give you the guidelines on what to send and how to send the partial you want critiqued. In the subject line, simply write AVB Winner.